Two brothers set out on a journey. It was a journey of exploration and one for adventure. They wanted to tell many stories from their travels, but one brother never expected that he would be explaining how he came to fall in love on the brothers' journey.
Lakshmana and Rama, two brothers from a large kingdom, started on their journey. Lakshmana was adventurous and wanted to see the country and his brother, Rama, wanted to be alongside him for his travels. These brothers were also princes and they were handsome princes at that. They wandered through their kingdom to get to the outer skirts of the city and people watched them pass by every place they went. Rama caught the attention of women, especially because he was the most handsome and the darkest brother of the four princes. They begged him to be theirs, but he refused because Rama believed in the idea of true love and he did not feel as if any of these women could be his true love.
They traveled until night and decided to look for a place to stay the night. They found small accommodations near the edge of the city where they paused their journey for some much needed rest. In the morning, they woke to pick flowers and bathe in the river nearby. They continued on their journey, only to end up in a beautiful garden with a beautiful lake and waterfall.
As the princes washed their faces in the whisper of the waterfall, they heard footsteps. Rama looked up and found a beautiful girl staring at him from a distance. Somehow, they found themselves in the princess' garden! The princess was beautiful and Rama stared at her. Lakshmana recognized their attraction instantly and thought to himself that he had to make sure that they ended up together. Their love was obvious from the start and they even looked like they were meant to end up together.
Rama simply knew from that first moment of meeting Sita, he would have to marry her. He loved her deeper than his father had ever loved any of his wives and he knew it was meant to be. From that moment on, no woman could ever compare to Rama in the same way that Sita would.
("Rama and Sita setting up their hut in Panchvati")
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Author's Note: I was inspired to write this story because of the powerful romance found between Rama and Sita. Their love story was so dramatic, I simply felt inspired. I wrote this story in a modern sense, so it can relate to modern generations, so they can see the power of a blossoming of romance. The story is based on Sita from the Public Domain Ramayana.
Bibliography: "Sita" by F. J. Gould, from The Divine Archer (1911). Web Source: Public Domain Edition Ramayana.
This was the story I chose, too! I really liked how you changed the setting. It was beautiful imagery that really helped to capture the emotions of the moment. I thought the part where the flowers fell from the tree as a sign that Rama was her true love was a very creative choice. Overall, the story flowed really well from scene to scene and I liked your writing style! It was simple, but invoked the readers' imagination with interesting imagery and scene development.
ReplyDeleteHi Hannah! I enjoyed reading your version of the original story because it was so romantic, dramatic, and just super sweet in general! It was definitely an awesome love-at-first-sight story! I loved how you described the male characters, Lakshmana and Rama, at the very beginning because it helped the story flow later on. I felt like Sita's character could have been expanded upon just a bit more because she just appeared randomly in the story, but you still did a really good job fitting her in! Also, if there had been some dialogue between the brothers, that could have improved your story as well just to give it a more realistic and emotional touch. I loved the setting of where Rama and Sita first saw each other because that made the story so much more romantic! I also thought the scene where the flowers fell while Sita was praying was so sweet.
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